Category: Pee Wee Herman - Dan Fiorella: Writer @ large

Dan Fiorella

A Writer’s Journal Journey 26

4/30/2017

I've been looking back on my adventure in Hollywood, culling pages from my journal...

Just a few days later Kevin called with news: the Warner team read the script and liked it, but they didn’t love it. They were on the fence about it. So Kimberly, who now no longer worked for Warner, told Joel & Bill to send it to Paul Reubens. An end-run. They did just that, sending it to Reubens’ agent. The idea was that if Reubens and his people liked it that would be enough to push Warner off the fence. Or entice Rueben to set it up elsewhere. Or just option the damn thing. In the meanwhile, Bill and Joel were still all set to send out the Flebber version of the script to others as soon as the option expired. Not good news, not bad news, just different news. “Stay tuned,” I noted.

A Writer’s Journal Journey 25

4/26/2017

I've been looking back on my adventure in Hollywood, culling pages from my journal...

6/24/91; the one-year anniversary of my Hollywood odyssey, Staten Island branch.

Kevin called. Kimberly liked the script. Thought it was better, funnier (huh?). Anyway, it was on the weekend read list for the studio folk with (we assumed) Kimberly’s recommendation. She'd be leaving at the end of the week (so how much would her recommendation even mean at this point?). Besides, the option would expire two weeks afterward.

A Writer’s Journal Journey 22

4/12/2017

I've been looking back on my adventure in Hollywood, culling pages from my journal...

A few days later, when next we spoke, I told Kevin that the option on the script expired May 6th, 1991, only a few weeks off.

Meanwhile, I completed and sent them the 75 pages I had. I thought the story was more heavily plotted but not “as funny.” I didn’t trust my judgement at this point. I scribbled that I was hoping the script reverts back to the Nick Flebber version.

Just a few days later and I had finished the draft of “Kringle.” I dropped the final 1/3 in the mail. Now it was out of my hands…

My Morning Kvetch

3/8/2017

Back in March 2016, a new multi-media platform was about to launch. A podcast, radio show with written articles on line to support the on-air hi jinx. It was a new comedy, The Morning Kvetch. And they needed experienced kvetchers to supply material to the website. Enter me. I had a number of rants and rant-like bits that could be re-worked to fit their site, so it seemed like a good thing. No pay but EXPOSURE!

Yeah, not so much. Granted, my contributions to the site started to wane as the year progressed but I was very much surprised to find out the site no longer exists. It's just a Go Daddy placeholder denoting the domain name is available. Gone, all gone. So, I'm going to drag them out and post them here from time to time. So, let us present:

Voting, right?

A Writer’s Journal Journey 12

2/18/2017

I've been looking back on my adventure in Hollywood...
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90% Finished! That’s what Kimberly the WB exec said.

It’s now the beginning of October. Kevin calls. They finally met with Kimberly and she flipped for the script. She was “wowed by how I both altered the script and plot points and captured Pee-Wee’s character” (That’s right, I did that). BUT it’s only 90% finished. A “few small scenes here and there.” A “little editing.” They want it down to 90 pages (I forget how many pages it was 110? 115?). They want a “subplot” with the elves, Trinket and Tweedle (um, okay). They want to introduce the villain O’Kiley earlier (“So we can hiss." Sure). And add the PI, Nick (Add Nick???).

A Writer’s Journal Journey 11

2/8/2017

Well, as I was saying before the holidays interrupted us, I've been looking back on my adventure in Hollywood...

Things were quiet during September. Except for one big milestone. Paperwork arrived from the Writers Guild of America. Based on the information that Warners had submitted, the guild sent me the application to join. Finally, I’d be a card-carrying member of the Writers Guild. Talk about validation! Except...

A Writer’s Journal Journey 10

12/15/2016

It’s the end of August when I note I mailed the script polish to Kevin. Kevin, again, was please it was coming so quickly. That’s me, Mr. People Pleaser. But word is Kimberly the executive is nervous now; it seems there is another Christmas story kicking around. It's been a long ride to wind up here...

A Writer’s Journal Journey 9

11/23/2016

I've been looking back on my adventure in Hollywood...

It was the end of July, a week after my last entry, when I finally wrote again. I had sent the script. Kevin and Joel read it. Loved it. I had impressed them with the speed and quality. We were then waiting on Bill’s input. At that point we would have to decide if we were passing the script to Warner (They thought it was that solid), just give Kimberly the Executive a look-see or start some changes on our own, like punch up the Lumberjack scene to be as funny as the Square Dance scene. Change the elf Truman’s characterization (he was a bit fey and maybe out of place in this version of the story) and some other odds & ends.

A Writer’s Journal Journey 8

11/17/2016

While attempting to keep a regular journal of my trip to Hollywood and its aftermath, it would be two days before I made a new entry to my diary. It was to say that the legal papers had arrived plus Les the Lawyer called to follow up. I learned the Warners’ lawyer is located near where I work in Manhattan (“Maybe when they cut the check I can just run over and pick it up. Ha-ha.”). Les is covering all the bases on this script sale; payments for daytime serial rights (wha?), credit-based bonuses, extra 1st-class tickets for travel if needed. On 7/20, I finished and printed out a full draft of “Pee Wee’s Christmas Caper” (Yeah, we never did settle on a title).

A Writer’s Journal Journey 7

11/10/2016

Continuing in my diary...My next journal entry is 6 days later, to mark the point where I was getting the first waves of notes on my new script pages. Going into the weekend, Kevin called, telling me he finished the pages and I did “OK.” But he felt I left out some things; Pee Wee’s decision to take the case seems rushed. Trench coat gags weren’t elaborate enough (think Harpo Marx). Pee Wee winds up taking a backseat to the elf character, Tweedle, in the end of the first 45 pages. We need to see Pee Wee playing detective; that was the hook, Pee Wee as a private eye.

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