After submitting draft one, I got to work on draft two.
The 1st act with all the rangers seems longer and I went very quirky with Q-ball. Roy and Niko are now old friends. The flash backs are more elaborate. But then it gets weird. I go all "Abby Normal" and lift a plot device from "Ghost of Frankenstein" and the robot now has an evil brain. And he's a lot more chatty now. As for stopping him, I gave the Ax an actual Achille's heel, a power switch located on the back of its foot, which activates him in the beginning and deactivates him at the end.
And I have Doc just waving his hand, wizard-like, at the Ax, as his way to control the robot. His software apps weren't here yet.
Both drafts have and underlaying message of "you don't know what you're capable of until you do," where the tech-guy eventually proves his meddle. Also, the GR shows always had some lesson, whether it was about the environment, civility, or tech gone wild. It wasn't always just white hats vs. black hats. It took some work to roll back the flashbacks and their whole "Doomsday weapon" theme.
And I have Doc just waving his hand, wizard-like, at the Ax, as his way to control the robot. His software apps weren't here yet.
Both drafts have and underlaying message of "you don't know what you're capable of until you do," where the tech-guy eventually proves his meddle. Also, the GR shows always had some lesson, whether it was about the environment, civility, or tech gone wild. It wasn't always just white hats vs. black hats. It took some work to roll back the flashbacks and their whole "Doomsday weapon" theme.
On this draft, I found the actual notes I got:
The biggest take-away? No Robots! I mean that was the whole deal of the episode! But suddenly, kid's TV was overrun by robots: Go-bots, Transformers, Robotix, Ninja Robots, Voltron, so we had to have something else. I want to take credit for coming up the the Golem take on the creature. Why is it crystal? Not sure. Doc taking down the robot with his software hacks? Not a thing. Unless...Well, something else to figure out.
To Be Continued...
To Be Continued...
